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Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education. Why do people do this? Would you consider yourself doing this and why?

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Nowadays applying for a foreign university proves to be the national trend among people around the world. There could be many logical reasons behind the decision of studying abroad. In
this
 essay I will talk about some causes of
this
 trend and explain why I believe that overall
this
 is a positive decision. The
first
 and foremost reason that forces someone to leave their home and country to study is having higher-education qualification. Undoubtedly, attending to a well-educated
professor
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professor's
 class is a strong motivation for all.
Therefore
, talented students make their best effort to be accepted in top universities to continue their subjects abroad despite the fact that being far from home and family have many difficulties. In fact, it has many benefits for them in
future
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the future
,
for instance
, their CVs Look impressive for employers. Another factor to consider is, universities and colleges supportive actions, that encourage individuals to travel with the purpose of studying. What is more, financial
aids including
Accept comma addition
aids, including
 grant, loans and accommodation costs help students to focus their attention on researches and studying rather than financial problems, which leads to excellent results. In
this
 day and age, I think that moving abroad with
aim
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the aim
an aim
 to studying is a wonderful opportunity. Having more job vacancies and speaking as well as writing in another language
fluently are
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fluently is
 most important encouragements which persuade me to apply for overseas universities.
Last
 but not least, becoming immersed in a new culture has huge impact on my horizon that can expand my networking connections too. All
thing
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things
 considered, studying and living abroad
have
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has
 many advantages for students to have better educational conditions and efforts the possibility to improve their personality and
also
 learning new skills.
Although
, I think leaving home cause some hardship, it has many positive aspects for our future career.
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