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In the past when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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 modern era, higher studies are essential to boost one’s knowledge and skills.
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 previously people were studying in their national institutes, now they have gotten chances to study in other countries. In
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 development are under discussion.
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, in today’s job market kids need to go for higher studies and learn different skills to achieve a good position in their
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 To study at university before, students were going to institutes in their own country, but now many are choosing to go to other countries. Students who choose to study in their own country are close to their family most of the time and having homemade food which is good for health, whereas students studying in different countries get a better environment and multi-culture which develops their skills differently.
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 . The semester exchange program is one example that supports and helps many persons to get knowledge and enhance their skills.
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, many countries do not have the quality of education in certain fields.
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, people who want to pursue their
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 in aviation are not studying in Pakistan and they are moving towards France or Germany to get a university
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 . Apart from that, those studying abroad, even do not have moral support, and their physical and mental health gets affected.
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, sometimes these people need to work along with their studies to meet their expenses. To sum up, the university
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 is playing a vital role in the
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 path and some of the students
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 in their homeland.
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 necessary to grab the opportunity to achieve a good position in life.
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