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The Development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the Advantage and Disadvantage to having one language in the world?

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In the past, libraries played an important role in social life, they
were one
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were in one place,
place
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, where people can read books because before the 20th century the books were expensive and only rich citizens can buy them. Nowadays the Internet is a common thing, people have the ability to download books for reading and for doing research work or studying. It is believed that the meaning of public libraries
decreases
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has decreased
is decreasing
 in the present time. I absolutely disagree with
this
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 statement and examine
this
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 in the essay.
Firstly
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, public libraries
are
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is
 a
place
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 where parents can demonstrate a positive attitude to reading for children,
moreover
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, it is very important in our century with gadgets and the Internet. The public libraries in my country have special places for children with
color
of or relating to the cochlea of the ear
cochlear
colour
 book. Children can read books or seeing pictures if they are a little.
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, using libraries is a positive way to save money, a person can take a book for free or for little
payment
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pay
. The modern book from famous authors in good quality have extremely prices, especially it is important for students.
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, the library is not only a
place
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 for reading or
taking
an exchange of ideas via conversation
talking
 books, often there are a lot of events for the public.
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, libraries lead lectures about books or history.
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, they have exhibitions and events about famous authors.
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, the libraries have a wonderful atmosphere, very often, they located in historical attractive buildings. The library is an ideal
place
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 for reading, working, and creative thinking. In conclusion, society needs in the public libraries, they assist to decrease an illiterate level and save money.
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