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The following maps show some of the changes that have taken placein Dubai in recent decades Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons while relevant

The following maps show some of the changes that have taken placein Dubai in recent decades Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons while relevant
The pictures showed the changes
to
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in
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dubai
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Dubai
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 in the past and the present day Looking at the pictures
it is clear that
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 the area has developed considerably. The only remaining thing was the clock tower. In the past, there were a few buildings on both sides of the road and
this
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 area was covered in sand and trees
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, there have been lots of developments in
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dubai
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Dubai
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 in the present day.
In particular
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, many skyscrapers have been constructed at the side of the road. In the past. There were not any vehicles,
in contrast
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 to
the
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apply
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present day
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present-day
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dubai
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Dubai
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, the traffic has developed incredibly, which can be seen by the
increase
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 number of people driving cars.
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Further more
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Furthermore
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, a great quantity of tree has been planted around the edge of the roundabout.
Overall
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,
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dubai
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Dubai
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 has
been
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developed and modernized significantly over the
last
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 year, providing more facilities for the people living there.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dubai with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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