Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Advertising is
very important source
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a very important source
for promoting any business. Some people say that advertising is very successful to persuade us to
buy but
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buy, but
Others think that it is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. But I opine that both the views are equally considerable. When any Company launch a new
product
then
it keeps on advertising that
product
relating to its quality, quantity and price in order to increase
its sales which
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its sales, which
inturn
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in turn
promote their
product
and business.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
, companies advertise their
product
in an
extreme
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extremely
effective way that it makes
mind
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the mind
minds
of the people to buy that
product
.
for
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For
example, people do prefer Jockey's undergarments because of its charming advertisement rather than other companies. So, in
this
way companies make good money
by
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from
sales and are
succussfully
with success; in a successful manner
successfully
running their business.
On the other hand
, some people think that advertising is so common.
for
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For
example some
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example, some
companies
keeps
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keep
on promoting their several products through advertising
continuosly
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continuous
continuously
continually
that they fed up and no longer pay attention to it.
moreover people
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Moreover, people
Moreover people
also
think that if
company
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the company
had built
trust
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trust, then
then
it does not need any efforts to persuade people to buy things.
people
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People
would buy themselves things of their need without being impressed.
in
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In
the end, As far as my views are concerned, I conclude that both the views are equally considerable.
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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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