Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society To what extent you agree or disagree with your opinion?

#punishment #death #penalty #lives #crimes #violence #control #society

Yes

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It is necessary to punish criminal people to reduce violence in the country and to secure

people

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peoples'

peoples

lives.But

death penalty

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the death penalty

is not right

option all

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option, all

the time.As every person should have one chance to

change

himself Without

punishment

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punitive

peace in

country

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the country

is unobtainable. People won’t be afraid of anything and no place will be secure for good people.

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will find criminals walking everywhere without any worry.

to a very great extent or degree

punishment

is necessary to create a dread. So that people

with criminal mind

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with a criminal mind

will think twice before creating a

violence

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violent

act. But rather than

punishment

we can

also

change

their mindset by getting them proper guidance and moral support.Every person

deserve

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deserves

a chance to

change

themself

reflexive form of "them"

themselves

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Right? But I know there are some psychopath Who doesn’t want to

change

. All they know is to do

crime

, no lives matter to them. These psychopaths deserve

punishment

and if they did major

crime

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crime, then

then

death penalty will be the best case to secure lives and reduce crimes.

but

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But

due to political support and financial power these kind of criminals gets away with it and again be a threat to human lives.

Most common reasons

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The most common reasons

for crimes are anxiety

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Drugs

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peer pressure etc. So somehow out society is

also

responsible for creating these criminal mindsets. So

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I think

punishment

is not only enough to reduce

crime

. People should get proper educations

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government should

also

organize some programs for people who are suffering from anxiety

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depression

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etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

to a very great extent or degree

that people will be aware of the things they are doing

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If still they think same to conduct any

crime

we have no other option

then

death penalty.Some people

are better be

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have better been

dead for the society.

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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society To what extent you agree or disagree with your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

The leaders or directors of organisations are often older people. Some people think that young people can also be good leaders. Do you agree or disagree?

When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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Some people think that history has nothings or little to tell us, while others think that studying the past can help us better understand he present.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.