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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society To what extent you agree or disagree with your opinion?

#punishment #death #penalty #lives #crimes #violence #control #society
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It is necessary to punish criminal people to reduce violence in the country and to secure
people
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peoples'
peoples
 lives.But
death penalty
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the death penalty
 is not right
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option, all
 the time.As every person should have one chance to
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 himself Without
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punishment
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punitive
 peace in
country
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the country
 is unobtainable. People won’t be afraid of anything and no place will be secure for good people.
we
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We
 will find criminals walking everywhere without any worry.
so
to a very great extent or degree
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punishment
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 is necessary to create a dread. So that people
with criminal mind
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with a criminal mind
 will think twice before creating a
violence
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violent
 act. But rather than
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 we can
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change
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 their mindset by getting them proper guidance and moral support.Every person
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deserves
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themself
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themselves
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Right? But I know there are some psychopath Who doesn’t want to
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. All they know is to do
crime
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, no lives matter to them. These psychopaths deserve
punishment
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 and if they did major
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crime
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crime, then
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 death penalty will be the best case to secure lives and reduce crimes.
but
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But
 due to political support and financial power these kind of criminals gets away with it and again be a threat to human lives.
Most common reasons
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The most common reasons
 for crimes are anxiety
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Drugs
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peer pressure etc. So somehow out society is
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 responsible for creating these criminal mindsets. So
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I think
punishment
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 is not only enough to reduce
crime
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. People should get proper educations
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government should
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 organize some programs for people who are suffering from anxiety
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depression
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etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
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so
to a very great extent or degree
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 that people will be aware of the things they are doing
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If still they think same to conduct any
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 we have no other option
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 death penalty.Some people
are better be
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have better been
 dead for the society.
Submitted by Chintan Patel on

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