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Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#children #school #teachers #influence #parents #development
Study
 play an important role in everybody's
life it
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life, it
 is crucial part of
life
 without
study
life
 is nothing. It is a true fact that when pupils are starting their
study
 in
school
 than teachers take great impact on students
then
 parents and society. I am totally agree with
this
 notion and discuss some relevant reasons in following paragraphs. The fast and foremost reason is that in a childhood age
study
 spend lots of time in
school
,
then
 they learn numerous new things and gain knowledge. They spend minimum 6 to 8 hours in schools with their teachers so that's why these teachers take great impact on students.
Although
 in these institutions, they
also
 learn how to speak with others and how to give respect to others. The
second
 reason is that
school
's are the
first
 place, their students are starting their physically and mentally developmental. In these schools, pupils learn from their teachers some new skills which is vital for a daily
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
,
such
 as confidence, leadership skills, communication with others as well as numerous new techniques to achieve good marks in their academic results. 
Moreover in
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Moreover, in
 theses institutions give a good platform to achieve their goals and Fly more in their
life
. These institutions play vital role in every child's
life
 to enhance good platform in their
life
.
Besides
this
, teachers
also
 teach their children some new techniques about
study
 and sports field. To conclude, teachers play an important role in every student's
life
 in
then
 parent's because
school
 spends more in whole with their teachers and they make great bonding with him.
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