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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Demolishing of our environment has been a cause of concern for
quiet
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 a long time.
This
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 issue has to be tackled by both government and people of society.
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 essay will discuss the prominent step that can be taken to control the destruction. Major factor is
destruction
Suggestion
the destruction
 of nature is the industry sector. Gas emission and drainage of untreated industrial waste in rivers and oceans has caused a significant impact on the aquatic life.
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,
pollutant
Suggestion
pollution
 from vehicles has given rise to
gobal
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
 warning.
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, University Of Toronto conducted research, showing that the depletion of ice in Antartica has increased
of
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by
about
to
 2%.
Government
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The government
 could certainly make more laws and regulation, so that they can
obilge
put up with something or somebody unpleasant
abide
 the factories to treat the
disposal
Suggestion
disposed
 waste.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, our nation
admistration
a method of tending to or managing the affairs of a some group of people (especially the group's business affairs)
administration
 should look for renewable source of energy like electric cars and solar panels. They could encourage the public to use
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 source of
engery
any physical damage to the body caused by violence or accident or fracture etc.
injury
 by providing them with subsides and
tex
charge against a citizen's person or property or activity for the support of government
tax
text
 credits. In
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 way, the people will start to
shifting
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shift
 to electric cars slowly and will result in
benign effect
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a benign effect
the benign effect
 on
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
.
Never the less
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Nevertheless
, Individuals
plays
Suggestion
play
 a principal role in restoring our earth. People should try to use public transport and cycle for
daliy
every day; without missing a day
daily
activites
any specific behavior
activities
 and
near by
close at hand
nearby
 distance respectively. Paper bags could be used a
substitube
put in the place of another; switch seemingly equivalent items
substitute
 for plastic bags while shopping.
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 can be
conclused
having come or been brought to a conclusion
concluded
 as, The government and individual play equal part in damaging our
naturaly
in accordance with nature; relating to or concerning nature
natural
 resource and now, They should both try to achieve the single goal of restoring the nature by using geothermal energy.
Submitted by Bikram Billing on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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