Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that teenage is the happiest time of one’s life.
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there is an increase in
responsibility
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with growing
age
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, some people think
happiness
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comes along with ageing. I believe one can be happy at any
age
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group as long as one’s desires are met. In
this
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essay, I will
first
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discuss how having no
responsibility
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at a young 
age
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can be joyful for some, after that,
this
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essay will discuss how the freedom to decide in an adult
age
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group may lead to
happiness
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. Teenagers are financially dependent on their parents.  
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they may not be allowed to make independent decisions, they do not have any
responsibility
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for their shoulders.
This
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luxury of having no
responsibility
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leads to a carefree lifestyle.
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lifestyle is looked upon as
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happiness
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happy
by some people at a later stage of their lives.
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, a middle-aged man who has to work six days a week does not have the luxury of taking a day off for hiking with friends.
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, with growing
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, people become financially independent.
This
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stability enables them to buy things they like.
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, they can make decisions about their own choice.
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at
this
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stage of life they have to take the burden of their family, some people feel happy making these choices for themselves.
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, in a study conducted by psychiatry department of the Rawalpindi Medical University, it was found that buying a car of one’s own choice was among the top five happy things
of
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about
78 per cent of the population that was studied. In conclusion,
although
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some may find the teenage to be joyful while others may see adult
age
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to be a happy time, I believe the fulfilment of desires brings
happiness
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at any
age
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. Some may find it in youth and others at an older
age
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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