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"Prevention is better than cure" Researching and treating disease is to costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures.

#prevention #cure #disease #measures
Nowadays there are more different types of illnesses in the world. And either of them have not
cure
Suggestion
cured
. Preventive is a more effective way than treatment. A plethora of people wants to be absolutely healthy. Either of them go in for sports to be healthy. So far there are people who prefer preventing than spending more money to
recovery
Suggestion
recover
. But they
also
 may go to fix if they
can not
can not
cannot
 prevent their diseases. Because there are many illnesses that people
can not
can not
cannot
 prevent. So the I am strongly convinced that both of them are evenly important for the society. At
first
, many illnesses are increasing day by day. And one of them is diabetic disease. Nowadays, many older people have diabetes. Now it
also
 defines on children. To prevent it usually people follow right eating and eat less delicious foods. People who have diabetes should do more sports,
although
 for 1 time a day. It is a more useful way than medication.
This
 prevention help to a lot of people who have diabetes in the world. Personally, I think people can not preventive diseases every time. I mean that they will be required to drug. As I said at
first
 there are many illnesses that people can not preventive
therefore
 they will drug. Diseases can be cancer or COVID 19 which increases now. The treatment of
this
 disease has not found yet.
Therefore
 the needful thing to fix
this
 disease is only going to drug on time. If it has not any attentions or noticing for it, it appears to death. In conclusion, I want to say that In my view, there are many different diseases. And either of them, we can prevent but either of them, we cannot because we might not notice them so
therefore
 we require to quick fix.
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