It is thought that the increase in youth crime rates can be linked to an increase in violence shown in the media. Do you agree that this is the main factor causing juvenile crime and what ideas can you offer to deal with the situation?

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Violent scenes in the television programmes and movies are said to be the

drviving

having the power of driving or impelling

driving

force of ever-increasing rate of teenage offences. It is not the major reason why youth crime become more

prevelant

most frequent or common

prevalent

in many countries. There is no denying that the violent scenes of

media

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the media

promote illegal activities.

For example

Linking Words

, the main characters may overuse

violence

Accept comma addition

violence, such

such

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as killing the innocents and beating enemy with weapons. Teenagers may try to

immitate

reproduce someone's behavior or looks

imitate

the behaviour shown in the

televsion

broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects

television

or computer to see whether it is true or not.

However

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, if the children under 18 are well educated by their parents and teachers, these kinds of tragedy are less likely to happen. Without sufficient care

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the adults, many young people would like to be naughty in order to gain attention

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their father and mother. If they commit a crime, their parents may be very worried and

awared

a grant made by a law court

awards

aware

that they did not have time spending with children. In recent decades, parents in most

family

Suggestion

families

go out to earn money. After a day of busy work, parents do not have time and strength to chat with their daughters and sons to know more about their life. The lack of communication between parents and children

let

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lets

the children easily

to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits

too

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

208 words

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