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It is thought that the increase in youth crime rates can be linked to an increase in violence shown in the media. Do you agree that this is the main factor causing juvenile crime and what ideas can you offer to deal with the situation?

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Violent scenes in the television programmes and movies are said to be the
drviving
having the power of driving or impelling
driving
 force of ever-increasing rate of teenage offences. It is not the major reason why youth crime become more
prevelant
most frequent or common
prevalent
 in many countries. There is no denying that the violent scenes of
media
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the media
 promote illegal activities.
For example
, the main characters may overuse
violence
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violence, such
such
 as killing the innocents and beating enemy with weapons. Teenagers may try to
immitate
reproduce someone's behavior or looks
imitate
 the behaviour shown in the
televsion
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
 or computer to see whether it is true or not.
However
, if the children under 18 are well educated by their parents and teachers, these kinds of tragedy are less likely to happen. Without sufficient care
by
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of
 the adults, many young people would like to be naughty in order to gain attention
by
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of
 their father and mother. If they commit a crime, their parents may be very worried and
awared
a grant made by a law court
awards
aware
 that they did not have time spending with children. In recent decades, parents in most
family
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families
 go out to earn money. After a day of busy work, parents do not have time and strength to chat with their daughters and sons to know more about their life. The lack of communication between parents and children
let
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lets
 the children easily
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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