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In many countries, people are choosing to live alone rather than with their families. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In many countries, there is a growing trend of people choosing to live alone rather than with their families. I believe
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 can be a positive development because it promotes personal growth and independence. One reason people choose to live alone is the freedom and space it provides for self-development. Living with close relatives often means sharing responsibilities, meeting others’ expectations, and having less time for personal goals.
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, a person living with their family might spend much of their free time helping with household tasks
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 of focusing on their own studies or hobbies. Living independently allows individuals to organise their time
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 their own priorities, explore new interests, and build confidence in decision-making. Another benefit is that it encourages individuals to become more responsible and self-reliant. Young adults who move out of their parents’ homes must learn essential life skills
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 as cooking, cleaning, budgeting, and managing their schedules. These abilities are valuable not only for personal success but
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 for contributing positively to society.
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, university students who live on their own often adapt quickly to challenges and develop problem-solving skills that serve them well in their future careers. In conclusion,
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 living alone may sometimes lead to feelings of isolation, its advantages in promoting independence and personal growth outweigh the drawbacks. By managing their own lives, individuals become more capable, confident, and prepared for the demands of adult life.

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Use one main idea in each paragraph and connect ideas with easy words like first, next, also, but, so.
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Add one or two small exact examples to show how living alone can push someone to learn new skills or cause worry.
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Mention a second view a bit and then show why your view still fits. That makes your score stronger.
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Check grammar and sentence length. Mix short and longer easy sentences.
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In the start, tell what you think and in the end restate it clearly so the essay ends with the same idea.
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Clear view that living alone can be good and why
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Use of examples to back points
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Good structure with intro, body, and conclusion

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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