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Many working people get little or no exerciseeither during the working dayorin their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examplesfrom your own knowledge or experience

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The presented three pie charts compromise the amount of Australian people’s after-graduation condition
from
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of
 secondary school in three different categories from 1980 to 2000 in the percentage unit. Overall, the unemployment rate in Sweden had the lowest record during
this
 period while
further
education
 and employed rates were competing together and the latter one had the upper hand. 1980 was the only year that higher
education
 data exceeded those of employment with 50% and 40
% respectively
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%, respectively
, while the unemployment percentage was accounting for the minority of proportion with one a tenth percent. After 1980, the population of employed people increased from exactly a half in 1990 to 55% in 2000,
on the other hand
, students seeking
education
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an education
 were experiencing a reduction in
this
 interval. In 2000
further
education
 and unemployment submitted its lowest record with 37% and 8
% respectively
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%, respectively
, whereas the employment rate was
on
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at
 the peak with slightly over a half.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • physical activity
  • health problems
  • exercise routine
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • sedentary jobs
  • sedentary behavior
  • long working hours
  • lack of time
  • lack of motivation
  • inadequate facilities
  • stress and fatigue
  • lack of awareness
  • social pressure
  • access to parks
  • recreational areas
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