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Some people say learning at home or at school is better for children. What is your opinion?

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Learning is essential for life, especially for children. People usually prefer to find a good school for their children rather than teaching to them at
home
.
However
, in same cases learning at
home
 makes some parents more comfortable. In my opinion applying for the right school and trust teachers could be the best choice. Even though, unluckily, some teachers could be rude, absent and do not take after properly to children, mostly they are prepared and willing to their students' needs. To be a teacher is a hard job. You should be very confident with the subject you are teaching; you should catch all your students' requests, facing up to the fact that most of them are not even listen at you.
Furthermore
, you have to be patient and do not fall out with anyone despite the rudeness you could find in some pupils.
On the other hand
, I do not deny that learning at
home
 could be a good method to improve faster. Indeed, in a class there are many students, making difficult the teaching, especially in some cases. Learning at
home
 allows to have a direct contact with the child, paying more attention to his needs, enjoying the silence of a house.
However
, there is a big disadvantage in
this
,
that is
 the lack of human contact, essential for children. At the end of the day, I think school is the best choice because pupils needs to stay and learn together, but sometimes could be useful to have a teacher at
home
 to improve the knowledges.
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