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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years, social media has been a platform for all ages to communicate with others. While the majority of people think that it has a bad effect to our
life
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 and for our
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
, I strongly agree that social networking sites will bring a bad effect to our
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life
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lives
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 of all, social media can have a big influence
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in
 our
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that is
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 not beneficial for us. There are many bad contents that spread all around the
sites
a large and densely populated urban area; may include several independent administrative districts
cities
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, in Instagram or Facebook. Since all social media are accessible for all ages either kids or adults, there are some pictures or videos that the children might see in the internet platform but it is not suitable for them.
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, that kids can have a bad manners and a bad thought and if it is being continued until the future, it can have a negative impact in the way they act to their friends or in
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a work environment
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 had a negative impact on education. Because some social media are addicting, people tend to spend most of their time by chatting with their friends or scrolling around Instagram or Facebook to find any ideas or pictures. Because of
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, they will have lack of time to study for school and will mess up their studies and assignments, and
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 will not be beneficial for the students as they need to get a high grades in their school subject in order to be accepted in their high school. In conclusion, I believe that social media platforms have lots of negative influence
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 people's
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 as they might have a bad manners and fail in their studies
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 not good for their future career.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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