Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe that we should jusy protect some of them

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Nowadays, there

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

a dramatic fall in forest area due to rapid increase in human population and with

this

Linking Words

the

wikd

morally bad in principle or practice

wicked

wild

animals are victimized the most.

Meanwhile people

Accept comma addition

Meanwhile, people

have different opinions about saving and protecting wild animals. A group of people

believe

Suggestion

believes

that all animals should be protected while others think that we should only preserve some of them.

Following paragraphs

Suggestion

The following paragraphs

will discuss both views in detail. But

refers to the speaker or writer

personally believe that all wild animals should be conserved.

First

Linking Words

of all, all wild animals are part if our ecosystem and they have as much share as we have on

this

Linking Words

Earth. Due to exploit and overuse of natural resources by humans

Accept space

such

Linking Words

wild animals are getting wiped out.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

117 words

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Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe that we should jusy protect some of them

Include an introduction and conclusion

Question, without capital punishment our lives less secure crimes and violence increase , capital punishments is essential to control violence to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society？

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NOW a days people are using more consumer goods like refrigerators or washing machines. Does it has more advantages or disadvantages

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.