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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #health #service #treatments
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It says that ''
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 is Wealth'' and in
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 prosperous world,
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 is a prima facie sector of every
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.
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, Immense people in some countries are no so privilege to get a basic free
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service
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, which some believe that
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 should provide it at any cost. In
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 controversial issue, I firmly support the goodwill of
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 notion. Commencing with the my point of view on
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, it is irrefutable that healthy citizens has a great contribution towards the development and the growth of their
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 and they makes their
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 affluent, which uphold the goodness of
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 notion and
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, its moral responsibility of governing body of our
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 to proffer a good
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service
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 at no cost.
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, It's a constitutional right of every citizen, after paying a bundle of taxes to the
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, they should not be left on their own for any critical treatment which does not cover in their
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service
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 or if it's too expensive, Because the lives of every human should be the top most priority of every
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.
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,
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 treatment of very perilous illness or surgery of any inimical injuries is too costly for common people as well as for
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 to cover up the whole expenses, in
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 situation, there must be some subsidies for citizen that help them to pay for their medications.
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, sometime is cursed to provide free medical
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 to every citizen. Because, it
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 the hard working person, who pay the taxes and contributes to their
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, whereas some people, who highly depends on all kinds of benefits and just survive based that. It will be injustice towards
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 hard working people. By agglomerating all the views of
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 notion, people's contribution justifies their need of good and free
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 services from their
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, no matter how costly or complicated it is.
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