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Television entertains, but can it also educate? Do you agree?

#television
Can
television
 educate viewers or it only entertains them? Many people claim that
television
 do not provide right teachings and that it is useless, but I strongly believe that
television
 can teach a lot of things that would be useful for people’s life. To start with, people can learn different languages only watching
television
.
This
 means that, when people are
listening
(law) a proceeding (usually by a court) where evidence is taken for the purpose of determining an issue of fact and reaching a decision based on that evidence
hearing
 the spoken
language
 or reading the subtitles, they are
also
 learning it.
For instance
, a lot of children improve their
language
 or they learn another one doing
this
.
Secondly
,
television
 has a considerable variety of channels.
Therefore
, people can watch what is
of
Suggestion
in
 their interest to learn about and they can
also
 find many channels associated with
this
 specific topic.
As a result
, people can search something about they want to learn and it would be in the
television
 because of
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 variability.
On the other hand
, the education is not the same without the human contact.
This
 means that, by
television
, people are not being educated with real people and they are not accompanied.
Consequently
, people are not really communicating with others and they can feel boring and even lonely. Taking everything into account, I firmly think that
although
 people
can not
can not
cannot
 communicate with someone else and there is not a relationship face to face,
television
 can educate in many different
way
Suggestion
ways
 and a lot of things. People can learn another
language
 or improve their
language
 and they
can be learn
Suggestion
can learn
can be learned
can be learnt
 about a topic they are interested in.
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