Some people believe that the best way to produce a happier society is to ensure that there are only small differences between the richest and the poorest members. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
To illustrate, the point said above,
in other words
, people nowadays think that the most feasible way of producing happiness in Linking Words
the
society is to ensure that there is a low contrast between the rich and the poorest members. Correct article usage
apply
However
, I believe there is a broad difference between rich and poor. Which we will discuss Linking Words
further
.
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Firstly
, there is a financial imbalance between them as everyone knows wealth plays one of the key Linking Words
role
in life. Change to a plural noun
roles
For example
, even Linking Words
though
if a person is intelligent, smart or good looking those qualities aren't going to fill their stomach. Correct word choice
apply
Secondly
, there is a large amount of inequality in public Linking Words
such
as they knowingly, subconsciously or unknowingly Linking Words
differentiates
on the basis of Correct subject-verb agreement
differentiate
the
appearance, Correct article usage
apply
due to
that we don't even know how badly we might have hurt someone's feelings intentionally or unintentionally. Linking Words
Also
, in Linking Words
this
corrupt Linking Words
world
the poor suffer. Add a comma
world,
For example
, in some cases the rich pay more incentive and Linking Words
corrupts
the process and Wrong verb form
corrupt
skips
the line, Correct subject-verb agreement
skip
however
, the Linking Words
poorer
Correct word choice
poor
obeys
the system since, as their hands are tied in terms of power and advantagesCorrect subject-verb agreement
obey
Correct word choice
apply
although
, each and everyone should obey the institution. So, Linking Words
according to
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this
I disagree a bit with it. Add a comma
this,
Thus
, I think, a balance should be created.
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Furthermore
, Linking Words
on the other hand
, there are similarities, Linking Words
specially
the basic needs of a human being are the same for the penurious Replace the word
especially
as well as
the prosperous ones. Linking Words
For instance
, Linking Words
such
asLinking Words
:
food, Remove the comma
apply
cloths
and house. I, Correct your spelling
clothes
therefore
, agree with the definition on the Linking Words
some
point that it would create a nicer universe if we say that there is just a little diversity among them, Correct quantifier usage
apply
this
would Linking Words
also
bring Linking Words
a
mental peace for the necessitous and reduce their emotional baggage. Correct article usage
apply
Hence
it could be the best way to bring stability Linking Words
in
the environment.
To summarize, saying that won't bring a lot of change in their physical situationChange preposition
to
,
but could calm their brains and decrease their insecurity. Remove the comma
apply
Thus
, I believe it should be said out in Linking Words
open
to bring a little change.Correct article usage
the open
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