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Television entertains, but can it also educate? Do you agree?

#television
Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
 people are used to watching
television
 for entertaining, As a consequence
viewers
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viewer
often acquire
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often acquires
 knowledge. I think that
television
 plays an educational role too. To start with, it is common to see people interested in educational documentaries today.
This
 means that many documentaries and programs about world issues can be
founded
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found
 in
television
.
As a result
, people have an easy and technological way to learn.
Secondly
, the
fiction
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fictional
 broadcast on
television
 allowed to experiment and learn about different realities.
This
 way of entreating has changed the viewer’s minds. They could see and consume art from different parts of the world.
On the other hand
, the media and the news often misinform public. Viewers are informed in a non-objective manner, and often with fake information.
As a result
, people do not have their own opinion and judgment. All in all, I strongly believe that
television
 can
also
educate
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educate, although
although
 that sometimes media misinform. The viewers have the power through the remote control to choose and decide according to their profile.
Television
 is an open window
to
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with
 the word and knowledge.
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