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The only way to improve the safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences.to extent do you agree or disagree?

#safety #roads #punishments #offences
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People have different views on how to improve the safety on the roads. While I believe that harsh penalizing can help to increase the safety, but I totally disagree with the notion that it is the only solution to solve
this
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 problem. There are some alternative ways that cannot be neglected. On the one hand, by imposing
the strict
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stricter
 laws people feel fear whenever they will try to break the rules.
For instance
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, in
news
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the news
 we watch the increasing number of
drink
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drinks
 and drive cases these
days but
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days, but
 if people know that they can lose their license or can be prisoned by doing
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 offence
then
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 there will be very less chances of drink and drive and with
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 accident may
decreases
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decrease
.
On the other hand
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, Alternative solution can be implemented to enhance the safety. Government should install the speed cameras
everywhere even
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everywhere, even
 in the small streets and aware the
individuals especially
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individuals, especially
 youngster about heavy fines for not obeying the rules.
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, schools should provide education about safe driving so that individuals know the security order from their childhood.
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, in
news
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the news
 we watch more accident happen between youngsters. It may be due to lack of experience or young age. So, to resolve
this
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 issue government should take difficult driving test and increase the age limit to 20 for
license
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a license
. In conclusion, I believe that strict rules may not
be only solu
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the only solution
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his issue
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issue, but
 but implementing alternative solutions with harsh rules may tac
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with
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 problem
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