The only way to improve the safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences.to extent do you agree or disagree?

People have different views on how to improve the safety on the roads. While I believe that harsh penalizing can help to increase the safety, but I totally disagree with the notion that it is the only solution to solve
this
problem. There are some alternative ways that cannot be neglected. On the one hand, by imposing
the strict
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stricter
laws people feel fear whenever they will try to break the rules.
For instance
, in
news
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the news
we watch the increasing number of
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drinks
and drive cases these
days but
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days, but
if people know that they can lose their license or can be prisoned by doing
this
offence
then
there will be very less chances of drink and drive and with
this
accident may
decreases
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decrease
.
On the other hand
, Alternative solution can be implemented to enhance the safety. Government should install the speed cameras
everywhere even
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everywhere, even
in the small streets and aware the
individuals especially
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individuals, especially
youngster about heavy fines for not obeying the rules.
In addition
, schools should provide education about safe driving so that individuals know the security order from their childhood.
Moreover
, in
news
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the news
we watch more accident happen between youngsters. It may be due to lack of experience or young age. So, to resolve
this
issue government should take difficult driving test and increase the age limit to 20 for
license
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a license
. In conclusion, I believe that strict rules may not
be only solu
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the only solution
tion to
t
his issue
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issue, but
but implementing alternative solutions with harsh rules may tac
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with
e to
this
problem
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