IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 8

Some people say the Olympics Games are not relevant in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #olympics #games #st #century
In recent years,
Olympics Games
Accept comma addition
Olympics, Games
 are held every 4 years and it is joined by all the countries in the
world
.
Although
 the majority of people think that it is no longer relevant in
this
 era, I strongly disagree that it is not important for human
life
 and for the country.
To begin
 with, there are many advantages that people can gain from joining the Olympic Games competition. The participants can have a new experience of
life
 in those categories that they join in.
For example
, they join a basketball competition there and they can improve their teamwork skills with their teammates, and get more minutes to play and it can be useful for their future
life
 as a basketball player.
Moreover
, they can get to know their enemies well that come from other countries and can build more friendships with the people who have a same interest. The Olympics
Games
Suggestion
Game
 title can
also
 be great for the countries who win the event because it is an elite tournament
that is
 joined by all parts of the
world
.
In addition
, there are many categories that the Olympics Games offer,
for instance
, outdoor activities
such
 as aquatic sports or swimming.
Furthermore
, there are online mobile sports that are played nowadays via the gadgets or computers. Because of
this
, it will give a new opportunity for the countries who wish to win the trophy of the Olympic Games in some categories that they strong in. Since the technology is improving now, many people start to play mobile games that the
world
 knows as e-sports.
As a result
, it starts to become a well-known game and all of the countries start to make a team for it, allow them to compete with the other countries' team. In conclusion, I believe that the Olympics Games are essential to participants'
life
 and for the countries as there are many benefits that the player can get and it is a famous competition joined by all athletes in the
world
thus
 by winning
this
, it will influence the value of the country
Submitted by van on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: