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Sorne people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is generally considered that foreign
language
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 is learnt only for
travelling different
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travelling to different
 countries or finding
job
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jobs
.
On the other hand
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, tiny group of people
suppose
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supposes
 that learning a foreign
language
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 is leading in various aspects
such
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 as doing research on something. As far as I am concerned, learning a
second
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language
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 can be very significant for every subject in the World.
To begin
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 with, most people’s thought is that foreign
language
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 is used only in journeys or in
works
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the works
. These people believe that foreign
language
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 cannot be useful in their living space because in most places people do not prefer speaking foreign
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language even
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language, even
 learning
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second
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a second language
language
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 is argued that unnecessary in some countries and companies. As a good illustration for
this
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, most people who live in France never speak another
language
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 as thinking insignificant.
On the other hand
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, some people considered that learning
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is
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are
 very important because they believe that
language
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 ensure not only travel or work in another country but
also
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 opportunity of benefit different
sources
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source
 countries.
Besides
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, probably people who suppose that
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this
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This
 idea is live in multinational
countries so
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countries, so
 they need to learn different languages to communicate with each other.
Consequently
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, it seems to me that people should learn different
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 excepting their mother tongue because learning
language
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 provides different opportunşties for people.
For instance
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, people who know more than one
language
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 can benefit from different sources when they do research on their subjects or homework.
Hence
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, learning
language
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 is a necessity for both travel or work in different countries and discover new possibilities.
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