Nowadays, some parents pressure their children to be successful in a specific field. What are the reasons for this? Is it negative or positive?

In present days, as well as social prosperity rises, more people can afford
more personal vehicle
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a more personal vehicle
the more personal vehicle
more personal vehicles
.
This
exacerbates
traffic
jam issue in large cities. In
this
essay I will pen down possible solutions to handle
this
problem, and provide my own life experience.
First thing
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The first thing
we need to apply consideration is to minimise consumption of individual transport due to their over prevalence on city streets. Government should put
heir utmost power
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the heir utmost power
by increasing taxes on
this
type of transport in order to decrease
consumtion
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
preference.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, they need to contribute more money from budget on public transport by adding
separate road line
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a separate road line
separate road lines
, and increase quantity of them to lower
price
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the price
for
trip
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the trip
. There is an instance that was experienced in my country. In our capital
city there
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city, there
was a critical problem with
traffic
expansion, followed by long stagnancy on roads.
This
was tackled by broadening street lines and by prioritizing
publick
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
movement with special space for it. Final
way but
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way, but
not the least to handle with
this
aggravating issue is to expand road routes to relief load
on
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of
traffic
.
This
solution must reduce car
traffic
basicly
in essence; at bottom or by one's (or its) very nature
basically
only in still founding cities, because not all of them will be allowed to change historical locations in old cities. But there is some example from Qatar, where the large car flow was predicted.
Architectors
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Architectures
Architects
Architecture
of Qatar planned
proffesionaly
in a professional manner
professionally
each street to minimise rates of
traffic
congestions by simply excavating more roads.
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