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Band 4

Do you think that it is right for rich countries to pollute the environment?

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The environmental crisis has arisen at an alarming level since the
industrial revolution
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Industrial Revolution
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. Land and water have been contaminated and caused harm to living organisms
as well as
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 the
environment
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. Acid rain,
green house
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greenhouse
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 effect, global warming and ozone depletion are common terms that we have heard and will eventually cause the earth to no longer be a safe place to live in. Rich
countries
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such
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 as The United States and Australia are responsible for seven out of every 10 tons of carbon dioxide emitted since the
industrial revolution
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Industrial Revolution
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. Other
green house
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greenhouse
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 gases
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 as methane and nitrous oxide
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 contribute to the heat-trapping condition and result in global warming where the average temperature increases.
Green house
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Greenhouse
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 gases are emitted mainly
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 human activities
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 as burning fossil fuels.
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, flooding and drought will happen and people around the world will suffer from their acts.
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,
the
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apply
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soil pollution
it
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is
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 an undesirable outcome when rich
countries
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 deprive people of
lands
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land
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 for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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. Herbicides and pesticides are used to maximize the production to export their products regardless of the impact towards the
environment
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. The chemical substances will leave the soil acidic,
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and
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the clearing of
forest
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forests
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 agricultural development will
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 cause animals to lose natural habitats.
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, some developed
countries
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 have transferred their industries to other rural
countries
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 to lower their production costs. It causes pollution in that particular country and they have not taken the responsibility to fix the situation. As a result, the rich consume and the poor suffer the pollution. In conclusion, it is not right for rich
countries
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 to pollute the
environment
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 in order to achieve economic growth. Actions have to be taken to
slower
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 down the impacts towards
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environment
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the environment
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 and
human
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humans
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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