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In many countries, plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish. It should be banned. A/D?

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Not surprisingly,
plastic
 shopping bags have become a serious rubbish problem in many parts of the world, in recent years.
Accordingly it
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Accordingly, it
 is suggested that
plastic
 manufacturing should be prohibited, yet to the best of my knowledge, these bags are comfortable for people. Banning
plastic
 bags below a specific thickness is a
best
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good
better
 strategy to prevent
pollution
 of
environment
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the environment
. These bags are so thin that they easily split and
can not
can not
cannot
 be recycled. As
consequence
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a consequence
, they are not properly disposed and stay in the local area for more than 500 years.
This
 often results
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
pollution
 of underground water when water falls on these bags and absorbs certain
plastic
 material.
Furthermore
, sometimes homeless animals consume them and get sick.
However
, there are several reasons why I feel positive about
plastic
 bags.
Firstly
, these products
are
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is
 easy use, so they can be very comfortable for most of
people
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the people
.
Secondly
, if the government bans
plastic
 bags many companies producing bags will have to face bankrupt,
as a result
, will
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
 unemployment.
Last
, but not the
least not
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least, not
 all
plastic
 bags are non-recyclable so they can be responsibly disposed and recycled. Governments should enforce regulations in these cases so that plastics are regularly recycled and do not stay in the ecosystem. If these are properly recycled,
this
 will not only reduce the amount of
plastic
 waste at dumping
grounds but
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grounds, but
also
 reduce
pollution
 of
river
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the river
rivers
 and well as groundwater
pollution
. In conclusion, I believe that If
plastic
 bags below a particular thickness are banned and those above it are recycled,
this
 will result in an environmentally sustainable world while serving the daily needs of humanity.
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