Television entertains, but can it also educate? Do you agree?

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year, in the quarantine, TV tried to give some help for the primary students with some classes. To my mind, it did not work.

Firstly

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, the classes that television gives are too basics. I saw some

maths

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math

classes, and they were not doing the exercises correctly, they were laughing and making the programme really pretty, but they have forgotten

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about

the most important thing: help students with their homework.

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, they

are always giving

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are always given

false information. TV does not

check revise

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check, revise

the information that they

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give gives

and the parents of the children do not do it

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. They are really irresponsible and makes that the students can not couldn’t learn. They

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try, try

try try

to make it funny and

entertaining but

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entertaining, but

they do not do the classes well.

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, the math’s exercises or the history information.

On the other hand

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, cartoons have some morals or actions that could help children in the real life,

such

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as like

helps

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helping

to help

old people crossing the street or do not do something that could annoy you. To conclude, TV would never replace the

school but

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school, but

can

helps

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help

teaching some actions of the real life.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

191 words

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Television entertains, but can it also educate? Do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

It is important to be concerned about international events, even if those events have no direct impact on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think is a positive or negative development?