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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extend do you agree?

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It is thought by some people that the prisoners should be forced to do volunteer work during imprisonment. While putting people in jail teaches them a valuable lesson, I completely agree that they should get involved in a free service to the community during their prison
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 not only helps the
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 helps prisoners to gain some new skills. It is natural to isolate prisoners from the outside world, so that they don't cause any
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 trouble to the fellow human beings. Depending on the level of crime they committed, a rehabilitation program can be offered
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 and upon successful completion, they should sign up for volunteer work. Currently, there are many organizations who are relying on helping hands, especially old age and orphanages. These non-profit works will bring a different perspective and a new outlook to their life.
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, there are several information technology (IT) organizations who are constantly looking for volunteers to fill several positions
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 as customer service and tech support specialist. These roles expect people to have excellent communication and troubleshooting skills, which could be taught to prisoners through a training program. After the prison
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, most prisoners have a difficult
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 in finding new employment opportunity. So, if prisoners are involved in any
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 activities, they may acquire knowledge that can be used to find a job later. In conclusion, prisoners deserve to be kept away from common people because of the crime they committed.
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 should impose changes to the system that would make prisoners serve volunteer work during prison
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. Ultimately,
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 will benefit the local communities and the prisoners as well.
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