Television entertains, but can it also educate? Do you agree?

These days, a
lot
of television
are watched
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is watched
around the world by the people,
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
think the television
not give
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doesn't give
education to the people but entertain a
lot
of us To start with, TV programmes are not qualified to educate the people around the word.
This
means that Television
have not had
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had not had
has not had
the proper training to teach.
As a result
, TV not show content to all pu
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entertainment, but
for example
in the news and murder programmes
Secondly
the children’s need attention of his parents and a teacher that help to the learning, a
lot
of programmes shows a
lot
of erroneous information that’s is not certificated and is believed by the people who watch
this
programmes
On the other hand
, some people believe that the children’s can be educated by education programmes
for example
Discovery Kids, Paka Paka, Discovery Channel, Animal Planet and others, I thinks that’s programmes educated but no give an education that schools can give us In conclusion the television is better for de entertainment but don’t educated like the schools and teachers
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