nowadays people are not fit and active as before. these will have negative effect in the future health. what are the reasons and solution to this issue.

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advanced technological era, the new sophisticated technology and innovations has made our life a piece of cake with it's lots of benefits. At the same time, it made us so obsessed that we are becoming passive in our daily life, which adversely affect on our
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and fitness.
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perilous problem and illustrate some possible outcomes. Commencing with the USP reason of our depending lifestyle, we are habituated of making our work easy at every step of our life,
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as, we are surrounded with immense of equipment and machinery that work for us and reduce our effort, which had been done physically in the past that depict a sea change between the
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of our elder and younger.
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, our junkie diet is another prime
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reason behind our lazy nature and unhealthy physic.
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, young generation is obsessed with the fast
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and ready to eat
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that contains excessive fat and cholesterol and plays a vital role in our overweight body. According to one
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organization survey in the United State of America, 75% of young people choose or has been given a ready to eat
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or they consume outside fast
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as pizza, burger and highly carbonated drink on a daily basis. In order to overcome
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problem,
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and foremost step is to spread awareness regarding
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concerns and the detrimental effect of
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kind of
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in not just young people, but
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their parents should be told to take care of the diet of their child.
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, more and more public
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club facilities and fitness centre should be established which must be made free
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activity and
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but not the least, all kinds of high cholesterol and fat containing
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must be brought under heavy taxable categories. To recapitulate, I believe that government and individual both must put their best foot forward to improve our own
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and to overcome from the obesity.
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