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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology is now replacing their functions. Do you agree?

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The bar chart gives information about the gender proportions of teachers teaching in six different levels of
education
 in the united kingdom in the year of 2010. Even though, men and women
are almost taking
Suggestion
almost take
 an equal role in the teaching field. Female staffs are drastically more in nursery and primary
school
education
 and they are slightly over in secondary
school
 teaching. Male teachers are taking part when it comes to higher
education
.
male
an animal that produces gametes (spermatozoa) that can fertilize female gametes (ova)
Male
 and female teachers are equal in college
education
.
male
an animal that produces gametes (spermatozoa) that can fertilize female gametes (ova)
Male
 staffs are slightly over than female staffs in
Private training institute
Suggestion
the Private training institute
 but, male teachers are over half
in
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of
 teaching university students. In
Nursery
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the Nursery
 and Primary
school
 around 90% of teachers are females and they are slightly over around 10% in secondary
school
education
. Men and women are
teaching
Suggestion
taught
 equally in college.
each
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Each
 shares 50%. 55% of the men
are teaching
Suggestion
are taught
 in private training institutes and 45% of women are taking part. Men are slightly over
than
the cardinal number that is the sum of nine and one; the base of the decimal system
ten
 women in
this
 field. 70% of the men
are teaching
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are taught
 in university.
one
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One
-
third
 of female staffs are working in the university.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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