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Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is suggested that countries should increase money on skills and vocational training for practical
work
, rather than on educational standards' education. Personally,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that the benefits of practical
work
 which include
handson
Suggestion
hands on
 experience and collaborate with others, outweigh that of university education.
First
 and foremost, by doing practical
work
, people can gain a
handson
Suggestion
hands on
knowledge
. If a person expert in
handson
Suggestion
hands on
knowledge
 rather than that in
theortical way
Suggestion
a theoretical way
theoretical way
theoretical ways
vertical way
the theoretical way
,
Accept space
,
 they can easily solve problems with
innovativly
ahead of the times
innovative
 and
quickly
Suggestion
quick
. To support
this
, various studies conducted in The USA revealed that even though people graduated with good score, they are not performing well in the
work
 field.
In addition
,
employee
Suggestion
employers
 prefer to hire students who have a
handson
Suggestion
hands on
 experience in a particular field. So, it is really good for students by having more and flexible practical skills.
Secondly
, Students can get a chance to collaborate with others by doing practical
work
. Mostly, practical
work
 can be assigned as a group, contain minimum three students. By collaborating with other students, they can likely learn more
knowledge
 apart from academic skills like speaking skills.
Moreover
, they can learn their mistakes by exchanging their ideas to others as well as they can learn others idea. To conclude with,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that there are clear advantages for students by doing practical skills. The main benefits are they can gain a real working experience and make them to gain
knowledge
 apart from studies. Making their country people innovative is really pivotal for government, if practical
work
 is one of the way,
then
 they should pay attention to it
.
Accept space
.
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