"meeting someone for the first time through the internet is never a good idea. Do you agree?" 250 words

Nowadays, the
internet
plays a big role in our lives. Making
friends
on the
internet
has been popular throughout the world. The
internet
has become an important tool to connect
people
with each other. Some
buisnesses
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businesses
also
rely on
the
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internet
marketing to generate leads so
this
leads to
people
meeting
people
from the
internet
. Since the
internet
is so convenient, making
friends
may no longer be a problem.
On the other
hand
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meeting
someone
from the
internet
may lead to some troubles because some
people
may get cheated or blackmailed online.
However
,
i
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strongly agree with the saying that meeting
someone
for the
first
time
through the
internet
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is never a good idea
with
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the following reasons.
Firstly
the
friends
we make on the
internet
these days are different from the
real life
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friends
we already know. No one knows what their purpose is. From many past
experience
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, the relationship with
internet
friends
does not
last
long because they often come and go easily.  
Secondly
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there are a lot of negative
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effects
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or dangers when you meet
someone
for the
first
time
through the
internet
because you can never be 100% certain of who is on the other end of the
converstion
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conversation
.
For
example
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the person can post a picture of
someone
else and pretend that he is the one.
Also it
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is
also
easy to be vulnerable
whe
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when
you are talking to
someone
over the
internet
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for the
first
time
,
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because your conversation can flow easily
especially
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, especially
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during
late night
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communication. You can get so carried away and open up your deepest secrets,
such
as sharing
a personal information
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personal information
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or compromising
photo
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photos
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with a blackmailer. He will threaten you with sharing it publicly and demand money or more compromising materials.
Henece
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Hence
,
people
should be careful of sharing their personal information online with a stranger,
such
as addresses,
photo
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photos
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, birthdays etc. Parents should
also
pay close attention to their children when they are on the
internet
, teach them about the dangers of making
friends
on the
internet
and stop them from going out with strangers.  In summary
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meeting
someone
for the
first
time
through the
internet
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is not always safe because most of the
friends
we meet on the
internet
are not honest
peolpe
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people
. They are more likely to be considered as un-trustful strangers.
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