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The traditional life style of local people in developing countries is attracting and increasing the number of tourists to the countries which has the effect of preventing local people changing to modern ways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The given pie
chart
 provides details of the percentage of Coca-Cola's sales
for
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in
 5 different countries: namely, North America, Africa, and the Middle East, Asia, Europe, and Latin America in 2000. The line
chart
 gives information about the number of share prices for Coca-Cola between 1996 and 2001. Overall, it can be seen that Coca-Cola was the most popular in North America, and Coca-Cola's share prices had an upward trend.
To begin
 with the pie
chart
, The total sales of Coca-Cola was 17.1 billion
while
Suggestion
While
 North America had the highest
figure
 at exactly 30.4% which
was
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were
 more than three times higher compared to Africa, and the Middle East at 7% and significantly higher than Asia by 14%. The
second
-highest
figure
 was Latin America
at
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in
 25.7% which
was
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were
 moderately higher than Europe by 5.2%. Moving to look at the line
chart
, in 1996 the
figure
 started at approximately 40$ before increasing significantly to just below 70$ a year later,
although
 it decreased slightly by 10$, the
figure
 rose considerably to a peak at roughly 80$ in 1998. Over the
next
 2 years, it dropped dramatically to just below 50$ before rising steadily to finish around 60$ in 2001.
Submitted by Visuttha Manthamkarn on

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