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What are the merits and demerits of globalization on developing nations?

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Although
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globalization
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 has open the door of the developing countries towards prosperity, along with it has brought few misfortunes which
has
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have
 to be dealt with.
This
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 essay
firstly
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 will talk about the benefits of
globalization
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 and in the later part will discuss the cons of it.
To begin
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 with,
globalization
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 has helped improve
trades
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trade
 and ties not only with the
neighboring
having a common boundary or edge; abutting; touching
neighbouring
 countries but
also
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 across the
world
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. Since the beginning of the global era, nations
started
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have started
 to participate in bilateral and multi-lateral trades
thus
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 improving their GDP and growth in revenue.
For example
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, developing nation like India are attracting top notch companies of the
world
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 to come and set-up their branches in India, which will help
in
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with
 more job productions. Even-though India has been importing goods from other countries, in the recent past its export had risen drastically which consists of products made in India.
On the other hand
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, along with
globalization
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 has
come their side
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come to their side
 effect which resulted in
loss
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the loss
 of our traditions as well as culture and people started to glamorize the western
world
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, while discontinuing with their thousand year old civilization. As more people started following the western
world
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, they became more distant from their own roots.
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, people working in IT companies in India stared celebrating Halloweens and thanks-giving and not focusing towards their own festivals.
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 a sudden rise in the attitude of
younger generation
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the younger generation
younger generations
 towards their parents and elders reflects a direct effect of the western culture, if not address in time might be out of control in
future
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the future
. To conclude, I would state that
although
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globalization
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 has helped in nation building, but has distant its citizens from its root.

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