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The local newspaper is holding a "best neighbor in the area" competition. Write a letter to the newspaper to recommend your neighbor for this competition. In your letter, Introduce yourself Say whom you are recommending Explain why this neighbor should be the winner of this competition

Dear Sir, As I was flicking through the pages of your esteemed daily, I came across the "best neighbour in the
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" competition that you are holding in our locality. I would like to recommend Mr. Deol, my neighbour, as the most worthy competitor in
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 contest. I am Narinder Singh from 321 Bara Dari
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. My neighbour, Mr.
Deol
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Deol,
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 is a retired army personnel. Ever since he moved into
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 colony, he has brought dramatic changes
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 our
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. It is because of him that our
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 is the most beautiful
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 in our city. He has planted more than 100 trees in the neighbourhood and himself nurtured them by watering them every morning and evening. The park in our space was in a very bad condition. He went from house to house and collected money from all the residents
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 hired workers to beautify the park. Now all the children play there
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 he sits there to keep an eye on them. All the people in our field love him because he is
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 a big help. He is always ready to help anyone in need with his time and money. Being from an army background, he is himself very disciplined and is a good role model for all of us. Mr. Deol rightfully deserves to win
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 competition. I recommend his name once again. Yours faithfully, Narinder Singh

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structure
Put each main idea in its own paragraph. Start with who you are, then tell why you pick your neighbor, and end with a short closing.
cohesion
Use simple links to move from one idea to the next. Words like 'also', 'and', 'then' help.
content
Be exact with facts; you can add a few numbers or dates if you have them.
tone
Keep a warm and polite tone through the whole letter.
tone
Polite and clear tone.
content
Gives real facts about acts of help the neighbor did.
format
Has proper letter format with Dear and Yours faithfully.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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