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With an increasing number of people eating fast food , which if eating fast food too regularly can cause health issues, some people that the only solution is to ban it completely

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It is considered that the individuals are
most likely
Suggestion
more likely
 to eat junk
good
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
food
 due to which they suffer from health related problems. Whereas according to
few
Suggestion
the few
, it should be forbidden entirely. Nowadays, it has become a fashion to have fast
food
such
 as pizza, burger, ice-cream, chocolates, pasta. The main reason is most of the individuals do not have sufficient time to prepare their own meals at home
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, In developed countries most of the people have to go
for
Suggestion
to
 work,
consequently
, they are unable to spend time in their kitchen. Another cause is
affordability
Suggestion
the affordability
 and availability of unhealthy cuisine in some of the nations.
For example
, In Saudi Arabia McDonald's is easy to order as they have
variety
Suggestion
a variety
 of offers along with a fizzy drink. The use of carbonated drinks excessively can lead to health related problems
such
 as obesity, high blood pressure, chronic diseases, diabetes.
On the other hand
, there are only rare humans, which have a knowledge of eating nourished
food
.
Such
 individuals perform physical exercise in order to stay fit and healthy.
For example
, In Philippines students have given proper studies in their school due to which they are very much into nourishing their bodies rather than filling them with unhealthy stuff.
Hence
, they have longer life expectancy comparatively other countries. In conclusion, the government should take an action. All the restaurants, cafés, hotels menu should have a calorie counter. As well as the
vareity
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
variety
 of salads, including each
food
 group should be encouraged and promoted. Whereas, unclean
food
 should be totally unavoided.
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