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Some people say that art subject such as painting and drawing shiuld not be made compulsory for highschool students. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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People would argue that
art
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subject
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 which is vital role part of
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student's development
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a student's development
the student's development
 for a range of reasons and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would argue that it should be
compulosory
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a compulsory subject
compulsory subject
subject
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 in high school. I
complelety
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
argee
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
argue
 with the point of view and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will support my opinion On the on hand,
art
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 is
essential
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an essential subject
essentially subject
subject
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 for students because it
help
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helps
 them to promote
creavity
the ability to create
creativity
 and
imaginal
form a mental image of something that is not present or that is not the case
imagine
 abilities. When you are patient through painting or singing in a play, focusing is
compulosory
required by rule
compulsory
 thing.
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concenstration
the strength of a solution; number of molecules of a substance in a given volume
concentration
 is
the most improtance
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the most important
the most importance
 to study and search as well as working in the future.
Moreover
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,
art
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 allow
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student
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students
the student
 to show their self is better than math or science because it is
help
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helping
student
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 to perform thought and feelings without limiting words. If
student
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pratice
a customary way of operation or behavior
practice
practise
 regularly imagination, they will have a total development in the future.
On the other hand
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,
Accept space
,
there are various reasons why
art
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subject
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 should be compulsory in high school.
Firstly
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,
skills
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the skills
 that students learn from
art
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 can help them to improve studying
productive
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productively
.
Secondly
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, many of
art
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 activities
such
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 as founding a band,
paiting
graphic art consisting of an artistic composition made by applying paints to a surface
painting
putting
 a cartoon,..
which
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Which
 asks students to work together. Students have to share
responsibilitis
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
responsibility
 and
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 to gain a common
tagert
a reference point to shoot at
target
.
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,
art
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subject
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 increase solving problem and logical thinking.
For instance
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, which is
color
a refrigerator for cooling liquids
cooler
clear
? Which shape? Which size of shape, character in a paint?.
This
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create
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creates
 a decide skills
student
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's whole life. In conclusion,
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