Some people warn that the era of silver screen is coming to an end and that people will eventually lose interest in going to the cinema. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

Watching movies at home is becoming popular. Opposite of
this
according to
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
individual's views the cinema
has losing
Suggestion
is losing
has lost
was losing
its interest from people's heart.
As a result
,
Accept space
,
the death of
silver
Suggestion
the silver screen
screen
is soon. I disagree with the statement that film theatres will die. The
silver
screen
will take attention from people for many years.
Firstly
, one of the main recreational activities for people is cinema to enjoy with their families on weekends. After five days of work everyone
want
Suggestion
wants
some enjoyment which a person may receive through watching
movie
Suggestion
the movie
a movie
. Prominence of cinema is not declined from the heart of people.
For instance
, mostly all seats have been reserved by movie watchers on
saturday
the seventh and last day of the week; observed as the Sabbath by Jews and some Christians
Saturday
and
sunday
first day of the week; observed as a day of rest and worship by most Christians
Sunday
to spend time with their
love
Suggestion
loved
ones.
Secondly
, the number of movies
have been released
Suggestion
has been released
by producers on the
silver
screen
because
its
it is
it's
profitable for them. Movie makers know that the excellent display, great
audiolizationa
nd
require as useful, just, or proper
need
and
big
Suggestion
a big screen
screen
get
Suggestion
to get
attention from customers to buy tickets. That's why many new
cineplex
Suggestion
Cineplex
complex
may built soon near to the local communities. Another point to consider is that government is
also
allowing movie
theatres businesses
Accept comma addition
theatres, businesses
to expand which will provide occupation to youth.
For example
: the reason for authorities to allow may decrease in the unemployment rate.
Moreover
, local cities get attention from visitors to visit in their palace. In conclusion, so it seems that the reasons like enjoyment activities, jobs for unemployed and benefit for producers will not let the
silver
screen
to close its doors.
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