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Some people believe that smartphones are destroying social interaction today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many today are of the belief that
smartphones
 are injurious to social interaction. In my opinion, while
smartphones
 can isolate individuals, their creative potential for communication overshadows
this
 downside. Those who argue against
smartphones
 are typically wary of isolation. In the era before
smartphones
, it was more common for people to meet up at large social gatherings or see each other in person.
This
 still happens
today but
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today, but
 it is less common because
smartphones
 allow individuals to communicate and stay connected with their friends in the privacy of their own homes. It is entirely possible for a person today to stay home and completely eschew in person social interaction. Cases of these shut-ins have increased due to
smartphones
 and
this
 is
also
 reflected in the number of services like Netflix and YouTube that cater to isolated consumers.
However
, proponents of
smartphones
 can rightly point out their functionality.
This
 is evidenced daily in messaging apps like Facebook Messenger and
WeChat
Suggestion
We Chat
. It is easy to set up group chats to message, share links,
gifs
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GIFs
 and video for co-workers, family, old classmates, and various subsets of friends.
This
 type of instant, infinitely flexible communication was impossible in the past and the ability to share images and video allows people to be more creative and banter in new ways. Far from destroying social interaction,
smartphones
 have expanded its scope, accessibility, and convenience. In conclusion,
smartphones
 are not destroying social interactions; they are helping it, in general. It is important to be mindful of both the drawbacks and the new possibilities for communication opening up due to advances in technology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limit
  • face-to-face communication
  • social media
  • loss of real connections
  • distract
  • engaging
  • empathy
  • personal connection
  • addictive
  • isolation
  • enhance
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