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Success if often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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There is no objective scale to measure success. Most people think that a wealthy
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, who owns precious
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 is the most successful one,
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 it might not be true for some. A number of factors determine the progress of an individual, which ought to be understood rationally. Indeed, a wealthy
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 is thought to have an elite lifestyle due to which he can buy an enormous home, health-life insurance and educate his kids in a reputable institution. The cost of living has increased significantly during the years, due to which a poor
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 cannot afford these expensive
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. As a consequence, wealthy people fully enjoy their lives, whereas the poor people fail in fulfilling the basic amenities.
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, it can be perceived that by affording
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stuff
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, the progress becomes easier for
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 people and an improved lifestyle may be achieved. While, plenty of
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 may be bought from the market through hard-earned money,
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 illusion has become clearer for those who have all these things in their possession. A recent study has concluded that a successful
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 is the one, who marries at an early age and starts a family while in his 20's. The remarkable outcome of the study suggests that a happy
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 is more successful rather than a wealthy one,
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 those people advocating for a lavish lifestyle can only criticize
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 study without considering that happiness is not an outcome of having a lot of money. In conclusion, the idea of having lots of money looks good at the start, while it fails to achieve success, but with a loving family, anyone can enjoy a successful life, the parameter of which is happiness.
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