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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The visual shows the difference
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that happen
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happen
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happens
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 after the construction of an
island
. From
overall
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the overall
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perspective
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,perspective
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 we may notice how they provide a main route for
tourist
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tourists
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 who
are
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is
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 interested to visit
this
island
. Nearby there’s easy access to
reception
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the reception
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 area, where every
visitor's
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visitors
visitor
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 can pass by for inquiries and concerns. Not by far there’s a restaurant for people. There, they can
hangout
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hang out
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 and
have
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apply
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taste the best delicacies of
this
island
 serves. In every
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surrounding
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surroundings
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,surroundings
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 we may see a lot of
place
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places
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 where visitors can
have
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apply
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rest
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a rest
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 and enjoy the beauty of
the
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apply
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nature.
Lastly
,
in
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at
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 the end of
footpath
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the footpath
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 see can see the best part of every
island
. The beach, where there’s
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a
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special part to swim and cool down. More than the changes happen, we can see how the construction
maintain
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maintains
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 the natural structure and features of
this
hundred meter
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hundred-meter
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island
. And how a place can be developed without destroying its natural beauty.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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