Some people think that internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and community are getting isolated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Internet
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The internet
is one of the sophisticated modern technology that has improved people’s lives. It has now become one of our basic needs since it has helped everyone to achieve their tasks and has been beneficial to everyone regardless of age. People nowadays been using
Internet
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the Internet
wherever they go and share feeds
in
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on
social media. It is considered by some that Internet strengthens the bond between people while there are others who think that
Internet
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the Internet
encourages people and the citizens to lead a sedentary lifestyle. I believe that
although
Internet
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the Internet
has united
people but
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people, but
overall, it had caused solitary among people. On one hand,
Internet
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the Internet
has been the common tool of communication between people. They use
Internet
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the Internet
to access social media and
application
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applying
like WhatsApp to communicate around the globe. Social media like Instagram and Facebook are famous nowadays because it is easy for people to get connected with each other. We can easily search for the person we want to talk with using the name without having their phone number.
This
helps people to get closer
with
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to
each other.
For example
, my mother had a best friend whom she could not contact before because they did not have
handphones
electro-acoustic transducer for converting electric signals into sounds; it is held over or inserted into the ear
headphones
those days, but I helped her to search for her friend’s name in Facebook and the profile appeared. She sends friend request and was able to communicate with her friend easily.
Therefore
, people will be able to communicate and it brings them together easily using the Internet.
On the other hand
,
Internet
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the Internet
had
cause
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caused
people to avoid the real world and prefer spending time alone. People get easily drawn towards things that entertain them most like
Internet
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the Internet
.
For example
, my brother loves playing online games and he had lost interest in meeting people outside. He prefers staying
indoor
within a building
indoors
in his room and play online games all day
then
going out and interacting with people.
This
gives a detrimental effect on people like the feel of wanting to be alone all the time and would not want to step out of their comfort zone since they think that
Internet
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the Internet
is the only source of their happiness.
Therefore
,
Internet
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the Internet
makes people to fall into solitude. In conclusion,
although
Internet
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the Internet
is
beneficial but
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beneficial, but
the drawbacks outweighs the benefits of
Internets
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the Internets
.
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.
In my opinion, people should
leave
inhabit or live in; be an inhabitant of
live
in
outside world
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the outside world
rather than sitting and concentrating just on
Internet
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the Internet
.
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