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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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House
 ownership has become significantly important for people in certain countries.
This
 behavioural trend is found to be more common with the younger working population in most places. In
this
 essay, I would like to outline whether
such
 emerging trend is healthy or damaging to
one
’s life. Owning a
house
 is
one
 of the most significant milestones for a working adult given the amount of investment it entails. Easy availability of housing loans has made it possible for the younger generation to buy a
house
 at a very early age.
However
,
this
 comes at the expense of long and arduous working hours coupled with minimal social life. Despite
this
, most people continue to work hard for their dream home. There are two main reasons for
such
 behaviour in most countries.
First
 and foremost,
house
 ownership is considered as
one
 of the key social status symbol.
Secondly
, owning a
house
 provides a sense of security, safety and belonging. The individual is not dependent on his or her landlord.
Further
, investment in real estate is still considered to be
one
 of the best savings options as compared to paying
rent
 monthly, which is an expense item.
On the contrary
, there is still a large section of the population primarily staying in expensive cities like London, New York, Hong Kong etc. Who cannot afford to own a
house
 and
hence
 continue to
rent
one
.
Further
, people prefer to
rent
 out over owning a
house
 when
house
 valuation is unrealistically high.
In addition
, people staying for a temporary or short period of time would always
rent
 a
house
. To conclude, I don’t think owning a
house
 leads to a negative situation provided the individual does a thorough assessment of his requirement and financial condition. He should be able to afford owning a
house
 and
this
 should not result in any undue financial burden on him.
Submitted by Vijay Agarwal on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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