The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Money and
Time
are the two most imperative things in today's world. Shopping and spending on luxurious things have become mainstream/common these days
,
Accept space
,
where the majority of the teenagers, are quite inclined towards branded things, whether either to flaunt to their friends or maybe due to peer-pressure. Things have changed with
time
, and I completely agree, that teenagers love to spend their leisure
time
in shopping centres rather than doing something productive in life. Talking about the younger population, they like spending on unnecessary things like branded shoes, Lv bags, Apple cell phones, Zara's apparel, and restaurants etc. It's not limited to
this
, many teenagers spend their valuable
time
, in many of the plush spa and salons.
Besides
this
, when they start visiting shopping centres, usually teenagers tend to explore many brands, and visiting restaurants which are out of their budget, which where they end up buying & spending, even if it is not useful. Fore.G, It has been reported in the yearly report, by state consumer of Mumbai, that almost 80% of the consumer market
depends
Suggestion
depending
on the people under the age groups of 14- 21. 
Such
an attitude, which
This
is not a positive behaviour of teenagers, particularly when it comes to paying for exorbitant products, and wasting their
time
,
instead
of utilizing it in something more fruitful.
However
, they are not solely responsible for
this
, their parents play a major role in developing, of
such
an attitude and habits. Parents who have given liberty, and having a lack of discipline since childhood
,
Accept space
,
and agreed on everything
such
as no budget concept, not thinking before buying, whether it really useful to them? If we ignore all these things, the influence on the future, younger generations will be bad for
e
objective form of "I"
me
.
g
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G
, spending money and
time
on shopping can lead to a few possible things like the decline of interest in academics, the development of an attitude by being superior in front of their friends, inclination towards social media, to showcase their standard of living which is not beneficial to them in the long run. By observing all these things, many young children try to imitate similar things, and gradually start lying, and stealing money from their parents. In a nutshell, according to me, using leisure
time
for shopping, with proper limitation is good, people can go, and enjoy their weekend with their friends or family.
However
,
time
management is very crucial in today's life, money cannot be wasted by buying unnecessary things.
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