some people for the same organisation all their working life. others think that its better to work for different organisation. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Most people do not know if they will stay in the same organisation or they will shift to another job
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so people always think about the present and
foget
dismiss from the mind; stop remembering
forget
about the future of
thier
of them or themselves
their
life.
First
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people who work for the same company for the rest of their life the have
loyilty
the quality of being loyal
loyalty
to
thier
of them or themselves
their
job and feels more
comfortble
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
.
Moreover
, they tend to stay in the same organisation
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because they earn
high salary
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high salaries
a high salary
.
However there
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However, there
are
same people
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the same people
who work for different organisations because they more adapt and they do not prefer to stick to one company. In my opinion, most people are free to choose what they
whant
feel or have a desire for; want strongly
want
went
what
and where they are more
comfortble
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
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but many people are obliged to choose one organisation for the rest of their life. Because of the responsibilities they have
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such
as families
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kids and
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so on
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