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Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by many people that the countries must provide more skilled drill and should spend less on tertiary education.
This
 essay agrees that the more funds should be given for imparting
work
 training as it will create more jobs and people tend to stay in their home country. To commence with, it is quite evident that by giving job-specific training, young people will tend to obtain more jobs through these occupational related practices. To illustrate, many students, who cannot afford to pay the university fees, seek the professional instruction after completing their school, and prepare themselves for
work
. It not only gives them confidence, but ensures economic stability in their lives.
Moreover
, some children due to lack of jobs move to foreign countries, which lead to brain drain in the countries, as the overwhelming majority of the educated millennial shift to other countries.
Furthermore
, due to the soaring fees for research or higher studies, students’ resort to easy courses which help them not only in securing a job, but
also
 give them financial stability.
For instance
, in India, the government has started a vocational training program in schools, which promise a secured
work
 to the students. To conclude, it is clear that the benefits of
work
-related training programs, outweigh the disadvantages, by providing more employment to the youth,
however
, merits associated with university education
such
 as research
work
 should not be ignored.
Thus
, the government should fund the short-term training on the one hand, but
also promote
Suggestion
also promotes
has also promoted
 higher education for the brighter future of the country.
Submitted by Prabhjot Singh on

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