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Some people prefer to provide help and support directly to those in the local community who need it. Others, however, prefer to give money to national and international charitable organisations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many strongly believe that helping directly to social communities is more effective than providing
money
 support to those international organizations. Other people think absolutely differently, as they find it is more comfortable. On the one hand, there are many advantages of direct help, and the most significant you understand who you give
money
 to and
as a result
 make your own conclusion about those communities.
Furthermore
, you see how your salary is being used and you can make a decision, whereas it is necessary or not as well as it is more safety in case you can see that it is not lying and your
money
 would be in a great hand.
Last
 but not the least, it affects your emotional state.
For instance
, when you are wandering around the children's houses and communicate with them, you received lot's of positive feelings from them. One the other hand, transmit your
money
 to charity organizations, is especially convenient for those who are too busy.
Moreover
, by giving
money
 to «interchart», you can help not only locals, but
also
 individuals who live abroad. As we knew, international agencies who do that usually give some understanding of what does it mean to help those who need our help. As an example, we can take charity organizations in poor countries, when wealthy people send
money
 or gave them by themselves to individuals who live in a bad condition with the help of local and international community. In fine, help in any approach is good whether it is directly or indirectly. But in my mind it is better to help by ourselves, as it is more efficient.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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