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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Different countries have different constitutions and follow the rules and regulations to deal with
crime
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. Some nations are quite rigid in dealing with the
crime
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 and the law and order
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 like the tooth of a tooth and
eye
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an eye
of
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for
 an eye. Some people claim that the death penalty ought to be given to the criminals to save our society from savagery. To a certain extent, I agree with
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 opinion.
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 with, capital
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 should be given to heinous crimes like drug dealing, murder, and rape in society. Knowledge of
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 stern can generate fear among offenders.
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, people will think twice before committing a
crime
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 and even if it compels them do to so.
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, the number of wrongful activities will drastically decline.
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 to
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, a rapist destroys the family, the government should arrest
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preparators
the activity of putting or setting in order in advance of some act or purpose
preparations
 and prevent innocent people. To maintain the equilibrium in society, inexcusable offenders should have the same severity of the
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 sometime it should be the death penalty.
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, Capital
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 is against Human rights. All the living creatures have the right to live and should be given a
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 chance – criminals are not. Societies use legislative systems to prosecute the criminals and verdict cannot be a hundred percent fair always. To wrongdoing to the from the law itself, the criminals can be given solitary confinement and long prison stances. In conclusion, Capital
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 help reduce
crime
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 rates and prevent harsh
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
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, the death penalty is a violation of Human rights. So I feel capital
punishment
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 should be given in heinous crimes after being sure.
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