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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is not a secret that,
health
 is the most important aspect of human life. It is not a secret that, by some individuals argues that the average standard of
health
 of individuals will deteriorate. I agree with
this
 statement, because the many types of fast foods are eaten by teenagers. So, due to eating fast foods, the power of the people will decrease. I will explain with reasons in the essay, why I agree. In the 21st century, the industry of
food
 is developing and the industry in the top.
However
,
Accept space
,
the fast
food
 is spreading sharply around the world. Unfortunately, the many types of foods
such
 as pizza, hamburger are harmful for
health
 of individuals, but the major part of people like eating the fast
food
 especially teenagers when individuals do not have time for cooking.
As a result
, adults buy the
such
 kinds of fast foods and teenagers are getting used to eating fast
food
 products. It should be mentioned that, people are prone to diseases related to cardiovascular disorders because of the high salt and high sugar content found in these junk
food
 products.
Moreover
, the stress related disorders are
also
 becoming more common nowadays. Everyone has problems and the main part of individuals think about the difficulties during the day,
as a result
 the human stressed daily. So, daily stresses cause fatigue in a person and insomnia, heart disease. To sum up, I agree with the arguments that average of
health
 standard of human of life will decrease in the future. In the future, consumption of the fast
food
 will grow and the contact exposure to stress will likely contribute to the decline of the average standard of
health
 of many people in the coming years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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